Draft due Friday Sept 17
Final paper due Friday Oct 1
9/20/2004. Come by my office to get your graded drafts. Be sure to save these and attach them to
your final papers on Oct 1.
9/16/2004. Any actual references that you use will not count
against your maximum
of 4 pages. Please start a new page for references and
them in 10pt font. The citations that would appear in your text
can be numerically
bracketed. For example, you might have something like: "...
to so and so's claims that such and such, ... ."
On the general question of quotations, I definitely do not want to see
extensive quotations. You should even be
cautious about using short quotations. They will tend to only fit
in sentences that are summarizing rather than analyzing. But
raised an interesting question with the way that I framed your writing
assignment. The crux of the matter has to do with my
association of "malfunctioning" with the "machines" in question.
To elaborate on my intention, I am implying in my question that even if
we were found to be machines, we would then be "broken machines".
is, I am assuming (machine or not) that we are not experiencing our
original God-intended state of being. Therefore, if we assume
are machines for some reasonable meaning of machine, then there could
be a question concerning God's willingness to die for
non-machine-humans vs. His willingness to die for machine-humans.
If you were not having any issues in the first place, nevermind and
carry on. If this doesn't help, you may ignore the word
"malfunctioning" below. However, a position such as "God wouldn't
die to redeem something that doesn't
need redemption" would be looked at skeptically and would have to be
really convincing on why we (if machines) don't need to be redeemed.
We made it! We're back from that reality of mountains, lakes,
streams and stars to our reality of classes, papers, peers and
teachers. Each tends to make the other seem unreal or
"artificial" in a sense. Let us strive to maintain the
perspective and balance afforded by our coorporate time in the
wilderness. I thank God for each one of you and the time we spent
For your final papers, I want you address one of the questions we
skirted around during the trip -- "would God have allowed His Son to
die for malfunctioning machines?" To flesh this out, I want you
to take a stand on what it means to be a machine and whether or not we
are one. (Support your stand.) Then, regardless of your
take on whether we are or are not machines, I want you to discuss
whether God could or would send Jesus to die for us if we were in fact machines
(according to your given definition).
Be careful on this second point. Of course, I'm asking you to
speculate, but I want to see evidence of careful thought in your
paper. That is, did you thoroughly consider the alternatives and
did you have good reason to reject them? You probably want to
include the strongest alternatives you considered and careful
explanations of their faults.
You are limited to four (4) pages of 12pt font double-spaced text. Margins
should be 1.25" left and right and 1" top and bottom. You are not
required to fill all four
pages. However, as I think about the paper I would write for this
assignment, I see that a sizable fraction of my time would be spent
figuring out what to leave out and how to say things more
concisely. I'm not sure you'll be able to adequately address
the question in less.
You must have a draft by Friday Sept 17 (2pm in my office).
Here's the deal on the whole thing. Your draft has to be mainly
complete, but you don't get penalized for typos, sentence structure,
transitions, organization, or even argument coherence. The only
things I'm grading the draft is (a) completeness -- i.e., no sections
like "need to think about this and fill in here" -- and (b) reviewed by
a Westmont Writers'
Corner consultant. The draft counts for half of your total
paper score. So if you take a complete draft to the Writers'
Corner and have it reviewed, you would have to have a really weak
argument and not correct any of your typos to get a really low final
Your final paper is due Friday Oct. 1 (2pm in my office). Be sure
to attach your draft that you submitted on Sept 17 and on which I wrote
reasoning or thought-content will count for apx 30% of your final paper
mark while typos, sentence structure, flow, etc will count for
20%. Here is my abstract grading criteria:
An "A" paper has no typos and no
textual problems (transitions, word
usage, agreement, etc.). It also reveals careful thought in
reasoning/argumentation and creative thought in drawing upon the
readings and discussions during the trip.
A "B" paper might have a couple typos and might reveal careful thought
but lack creative insight to the readings or discussions.
A "C" paper would have significant textual problems or would lack
evidence of careful thinking about the question, readings and
A "D" paper would have significant textual problems and would lack
evidence of careful thought.
A "Failing" paper would, .... I don't even want to think about it
would lack evidence of any thinking or would be written in such a way
that it does not resemble English.
Remember, the object is to have fun. Writing might not be fun for
all of you, but try to have fun with it anyway. You might
surprise yourself. (Also, remember that the final paper only
counts for 50% of your total grade -- the first half is already in the
bag. How bad can it possibly be? You already wrote a good
initial written response and contributed to discussions in the